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breeskerg squad 454th sandtroopers
« on: April 06, 2010, 01:54:07 PM »
soldier a : seargent krik valmoor , species: human
soldier b : private dalmoor kresdak , species : human
soldier c : corparal beeskee vetzrentz , species : human
soilder d : private freah resglee , species : mandalorian
soilder e : private dahsado palmapal species : human
soilder f : private kroman gearator species : human
soilder g : private kerl makos species : human

story :
the sandtroopers of the 454th are highly trained for the wasteland of mandalores deserts and have recruited many f.n.g.s for the empire these troops debarked to resglee clans state of power ( back story so far will progress soon )
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Re: breeskerg squad 454th sandtroopers
« Reply #1 on: April 06, 2010, 06:39:05 PM »
nice!

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Re: breeskerg squad 454th sandtroopers
« Reply #2 on: April 06, 2010, 07:24:31 PM »
You got pics?  I'd love to see them!

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Re: breeskerg squad 454th sandtroopers
« Reply #3 on: April 06, 2010, 08:45:13 PM »
I dont see any pictures but i would be interested to see them because I love sandtroopers and besides Droids the sangdtroopers and stormtroopers were my favortite characters in the movie.

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Re: breeskerg squad 454th sandtroopers
« Reply #4 on: April 08, 2010, 07:00:49 AM »
by the way there stationed on mandalore and are going to unwind in my whole mando saga  :o :o :o :o :o :o so................................ ill try get buy a camera as i have no cam so...................... and ive done two already seargent and at-st gunner he looks nice "!!  ¬ 8)

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Re: breeskerg squad 454th sandtroopers
« Reply #5 on: June 14, 2010, 09:49:13 AM »
  the squad embarks for kyro a small village in the mandalorian desert unfortunatley there transport veichle has broke down so they obviously need to walk as their comm units have failed in the storm witch is brewing but much worse will come....

dezmee: hey... who stole my snacks i got in greflora
grendasflo: no one fat boy ( mutters  )  cant even fit in his extra large suit
dezmee : so if im fat i get better kills than you huh?
hanloy : pack it in troops!
trenly: unidenified npcs coming from north !!
hanloy : positions !! point,aim!!
( nothing except the storm )
hanloy : tren theres somin' wrong with that stupid kriffing radar !!
trenly: well....not my fault ??
frenzes: gu- arghhhhhghhhhh help m- nooooo errrghhhh
dezmee: frenz ,kriff, fire!!
hanloy : whats that tren what is it .gren flank me !!
thats a preveiw whole story coming needed to get your spine rattling

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Re: breeskerg squad 454th sandtroopers
« Reply #6 on: June 14, 2010, 10:12:26 AM »
                      Breeskerg squad 454th  squad

         Chapter 1
         News

  Dezmee : you alright tren
  Trenly : yeh’ nothing much just a clip on the ear
  They began walking down a seemingly endless corridor then turned into a room after pressing a few buttons on the wall
   Frenzes and freah resglee swere slunched on the bed in the corner of the room dribbling at new zeltron holo cards witch released 5 days ago
 Frenzes : she’s  well better  than her though
 Freah : no doubt about that
 They both started laughing , they became friends when freah walked near are table at lunch and frenzes welcomed him to the squad ever since they’ve been friends
 At last frenzes noticed the two in the doorway suspiciously looking at the hunched figures in the corner
  Frenzes : hey dez , alright tren you get punishment laps for it or a simple ‘ don’t do it again junior ‘ from hanloy and sergeant valmoor
   Trenly : yeah you got it
    Dezmee  smiled at himself at how he had become so welcomed to the whole regiment everything was better than the streets he had more friends was better and a new phobonic arm helped much better than one hand
    Freah : woah look at this one then fren ooohhh 
    Frenzes : kriff , you wanna’ trade
    With a big smile no one could resist but he was proven wrong
    Freah: that smile only gets girls not holo cards , especially off me
    Frenzes : I hate you wahhh
     Pretending to cry he then sneakily lunged for the card but as he did his hand caught freah’s big hand
     Freah : too slow
     Dezmee: so…… when we going to this mission back to mando land tren
     As they sat on the bunks
     Trenly : yeah two days . can’t wait

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Re: breeskerg squad 454th sandtroopers
« Reply #7 on: June 14, 2010, 11:54:17 AM »
Chapter 2
   The beginning of much more
    
    The squad of 12 all loped towards the hangar chattering away
     Dezmee: so what are we dealing with anything new except old phonies pretending to be sith
      Trenly: well… there has been some disruption in this small town kyro or something well as you know we have to patrol and scout the area and if everythings clear we just go in . with guns raised though .
      Dezmee : yeah , of course  
      Beeskee walked nearer to trenly and then put a extra magazine in his belt
      Trenly: errrr whats that for
      Beeskee : I had a spare that’s all
      Trenly :okay
      Trenly walked with dezmee until they reached the hangar then he drifted to freah and frenzes
      Trenly : ( cocky voice ) you still got those cards ( big grin )
      Frenzes : oh my !! hes actually mateur  !! see freah that’s a bad excuse for a man ( pointing finger at trenly )
     Frenzes and freah laughed
     Trenly: looking at holo cards all day and laughing childely is mateur !?!?!? yeah  right
      Frenzes : yeah…well …shut up then !
   They walked in the cargo bay of a junk ship to disguise them this was the worst mistake ever
« Last Edit: June 14, 2010, 11:56:01 AM by darth neo »

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Re: breeskerg squad 454th sandtroopers
« Reply #8 on: June 14, 2010, 12:44:56 PM »
Darth, topic moved as requested...

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Re: breeskerg squad 454th sandtroopers
« Reply #9 on: June 14, 2010, 01:15:24 PM »
Nice Read Neo!
As do I. It is our lot in life, Master. Shall we find something to kill to cheer us up?
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Re: breeskerg squad 454th sandtroopers
« Reply #10 on: June 15, 2010, 11:52:58 AM »
cheers and i nearly broke the roof at being mentioned in the front page and 3rd chapter has a little bit of a delay

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Re: breeskerg squad 454th sandtroopers
« Reply #11 on: June 15, 2010, 11:55:24 AM »
just to notify mine is yavin + era maybe hoth + but still every one makes mistakes even rob green usa vs england world cup  :-\

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Re: breeskerg squad 454th sandtroopers
« Reply #12 on: June 15, 2010, 12:03:09 PM »
Darth, I apologise, I didn't get a chance to read through your story and I stupidly assumed that it was a Clone Wars..Consider my hands slapped...

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Re: breeskerg squad 454th sandtroopers
« Reply #13 on: June 15, 2010, 12:12:09 PM »
nah its okay i dont mind

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Re: breeskerg squad 454th sandtroopers
« Reply #14 on: July 03, 2010, 10:46:39 AM »
great stuff mate i hope you have more time on this !  :P