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867th Drakon Battalion
« on: June 09, 2010, 02:51:14 PM »
                                                              Genma, 2 months after geonosis

                                                                                    Introduction

"This is not a good day." Commander Vice combed his hair to the side.  "What was the point of hair anyway?" He thought.  It just got in the way and made his head itch inside his helmet

 

His Leutenant ran up to him.

 

Leutenant Kliks:"Droids have breached the gate!  Where are those reinforcements???"

 

Commander Vice:"I don't know leutenant.  Try comming Venetor "Serenity".

 

Kliks:"No good sir droids are jamming us."

 

*explosions*

 

Vice slipped his helmet back on.

 

Vice:"Lets go.  This sector is lost.  Have Hack work on getting the com channels back up."

 

No.  This is not a good day at all.

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To be continued....
 
« Last Edit: June 09, 2010, 02:53:02 PM by bly272 »
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Re: 867th Drakon Battalion
« Reply #1 on: June 09, 2010, 03:15:46 PM »
That's a nice start Bly!
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Re: 867th Drakon Battalion
« Reply #2 on: June 09, 2010, 03:34:33 PM »
nice read!
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Re: 867th Drakon Battalion
« Reply #3 on: June 09, 2010, 04:22:14 PM »
1: New Base

 

Field Comm center

 

Vice: "Kliks, damage report!"

 

Kliks: "50 dead sir, 10 wounded, 5 lartys down.  Leaves us with 3 ships to haul away 40 soldiers"

 

Vice: "Hmmm.... Where the stang is Hack?"

 

Kliks: "He should be comming.  I wish we had a Jedi about now."

 

Vice: "I wish this Fierfek war was over, we all had a 10 year vacation, and that I was the king of a hill and wore a shiny hat."

 

Hack arived at the comm center

 

Hack: "If wishes were horses we'd all be eatin steak sir.  Now wat did you need?  Get the comms up and running?  Thats as easy as spreading sullstan jam on bread..."

 

Vice: "I believe the saying is 'If wishes were horses then beggars would ride' but never mind...  Now get to work on that comm."

 

Hack: yessir

 

Trooper in next room: Tinnies comming in!!!

 

Vice drew his side arms and ran in to the next room.

 

Vice: "Kliks!  Stay in there to get the message to 'Serenity'!"

 

Troopers flanked the doors and fired.

 

Vice emtied a couple clips through the door way.  Several troopers fell, and medic ran to them. 

 

Trooper: SBDs comming in!

 

Vice: "fall back to the gunships!"

 

Wounded trooper: "leave us sir. we'll just be dead weight."

 

Vice: "No one gets left behind"

 

Vice picked up the wounded trooper and ran for the Gunships.

 

Vice: "Klicks!  forget about the comms!  Get the stang over to the gunships and bring Hack with you!  Shoot him if you have to to get him away from the machine!

 

Kliks: "Woohoo! I get to shoot ya Hack!"

 

Hack:"Whaaaat????"

 

Kliks: "Commander's orders.  Either that or get to the ships."

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Laat/I Gunship

 

Vice:"Medic!  How many casualties?"

 

Medic: "5 more dead sir.  As well as 5 criticaly wounded.  I only have basic supplies here.  I don't know if they'll make it."

 

Vice: "We have to make do with what we have.  Do your best to keep those troops alive."

 

Vice went on a private comm channel to talk to the pilot of the gunship.

 

Vice: "Pilot where can you put us down in a safe spot?"

 

Pilot: "It looks like there is an old abandoned Sep base 2 klicks away... How about that sir?"

 

Vice: "Sounds good.  The seps wouldn't mind or think of looking there."

 

At the abandoned base Vice looked around.  There wouldn't be medical suplise seeing as the droids didn't get wounded.  The Medics had set up a Makeshift E.R.   Also there were many blasters so his troops would be good on ammo,  and the pilots found some fule reserves.  If the troops needed to escape they would have full tanks. 

 

Vice sat down and took a much-needed nap.

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To be coninued....
« Last Edit: June 10, 2010, 01:37:51 PM by bly272 »
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Re: 867th Drakon Battalion
« Reply #4 on: June 10, 2010, 12:25:17 AM »
that was superb!
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Re: 867th Drakon Battalion
« Reply #5 on: June 10, 2010, 02:14:09 PM »
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Vice woke up.  It was much darker outside than when he had gone to sleep.  Yet there was light.  It was a light he new to well: The light of a blaster bolt.  He slipped on his helmet and drew his side arms, as he did this he ran over to Kliks, who was firing his rifle behind some cover.

 

Vice: "How long was I asleep?"

 

Kliks: "Long enough to skip the first part of the battle."

 

Vice fired off several shots and downed 3 droids.  He commed Hack.

 

Vice:"Hack get those comms up!!!"

 

Kliks: "He did sir.  Thats how the droids got a lock on us."

 

Vice:"Did you comm 'serenity'?"

 

Kliks"Yessir.  We sure did.  Don't know how much got through though.  The clankers jamed us quicker than usual."

 

Vice:" Give me your rifle."

 

Kliks handed him the rifle.

 

Kliks:"What are ya gonna do?"

 

Vice: "You'll see."

 

Vice ran across the base to his special modified gunship.  He pulled out a grenade launcher attachment.  After that he loaded it, and ran to the doorway where several soldiers were firing at the droids.  Vice aimed at the ground in front of the droids.  He fired. 

 

Vice:"Metal fireworks tonight boys!"

 

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Vice walked over to a gunship, and and asked the pilot:

 

Vice: "Why didn't you start the ships?"

 

Pilot:"Couldn't sir.  We gotta land lock."

 

Vice:"A land lock???  Since when have the seps been using those???"

 

Pilot:"Obviously since erlier, sir."

 

Trooper across the base: "more Droids comming!  Got Spiders too!"

 

Vice: "Prepare for battle!"

 

Trooper:"Here clanker clanker clanker..."

 

Trooper #2: "If we make it through this one drinks are on me!"

 

Trooper #3:"I'll hold ya to that."

 

The droids advanced and fired.  One, two spider droids down, leaving 7.  The spider droids had blown a hole in the wall and battle droids began pouring in.

 

Vice ran over to the wall with his side arms firing away, several troopers backing him up.  A trooper threw a grenade, taking out two more spiders droids.  Vice holstered his side arms and brought out his rife.  After ataching the grenade launcher he fired, taking out the remaining spider droids.  The clones fired away at the remaining battle droids.

 

Trooper#1: "We got some SBDs comming to join the party!"

 

Trooper#3: "Well they'll get a mighty fine present here..."

 

The trooper re-loaded hid rotary blaster cannon.  The droids were 30 feet away.

 

Trooper#3:"Wait for it..."

 

20 feet.

 

Trooper#3:"Wait For it..."

 

10 feet.

 

Trooper#3: "Alright tinnies!  Suck it!"

 

And he jumped in to the door way and let loose a storm of blaser bolts.

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To Be Continued....
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Re: 867th Drakon Battalion
« Reply #6 on: June 10, 2010, 02:32:22 PM »
am lovin this story
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Re: 867th Drakon Battalion
« Reply #7 on: June 11, 2010, 11:45:16 AM »
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Re: 867th Drakon Battalion
« Reply #8 on: June 11, 2010, 12:20:16 PM »
I like this story!
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Re: 867th Drakon Battalion
« Reply #9 on: June 11, 2010, 12:39:20 PM »
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Re: 867th Drakon Battalion
« Reply #10 on: June 14, 2010, 12:02:36 PM »
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Re: 867th Drakon Battalion
« Reply #11 on: June 14, 2010, 12:41:50 PM »
The dialogue is very smoothly written, this is a very enjoyable read!
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Re: 867th Drakon Battalion
« Reply #12 on: June 18, 2010, 09:18:37 AM »
Hey guys unfortunately it seems I have a bita writer's block.  trying to thinks stuff up for this but i'm gettin nothin at the moment.
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