The Imperial Shipyards
Imperial Creative Engineering => Graphic Fiction => Topic started by: Lance Quazar on May 06, 2013, 06:54:18 PM
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Well, guys, here it is! This isn't a second chapter, per se, it's the second HALF of the chapter I posted in January. Meant to be read as one continuous story, but I got impatient and threw up the first half early. Sorry for the delay, but I hope you all enjoy this one!!
Like so many other pieces of work in this forum, this story will find a permanent home on display at the amazing Photonovel Alliance website - photonovelalliance.com (http://photonovelalliance.com)
Please drop by the site to check out new offerings and old favorites. There's lots of great new stuff there that we'll discuss in detail soon.
But for right now, here's the chapter!
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Wow, I didn't see that coming. Pretty cool. So did Aayla actually off ole Bly? I have to know is he a goner?
Thanks for sharing this with us and this update is now on the front page.
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Nice story! I like the twist at the end. Very M Night Shyamalan-ish dude, lol xwing
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I love it. Nice Work, Nice Story. Wonderful
And hey the Dios fit to all.
Hope to see more...
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I commented more at the Yak, but also wanted to share some support here.
This was one hell of a chapter - you did a great job with storytelling here. The tension really built up with the space battle, and how the Imperials were monitoring the battle from afar.
I like how she sacrificed her droid and tricked the Imperials - very clever! Now I can't wait for more.
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Wow, I didn't see that coming. Pretty cool. So did Aayla actually off ole Bly? I have to know is he a goner?
Thanks for sharing this with us and this update is now on the front page.
Thanks for the support, as always!!!!
The fate of Bly will be revealed in the next chapter!* Ha ha ha.
*(if there is a next chapter.....)
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If, you say if?
You can't get me hooked and then not leave another chapter to keep us guessing!
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If, you say if?
You can't get me hooked and then not leave another chapter to keep us guessing!
If I never get to making it, I'll just tell you what happens.
Kinda lame, I know.
So here's hoping I can turn out another chapter in less than six years!
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Awesome love to see the behind the scenes with these dio pieces specially that door they look like they are Hasbro made playsets are they plastic or foamcore?
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Lance, you can continue your series, and you will.
You're an icon for the photonovel genre. You will continue this series.
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Lance, you can continue your series, and you will.
You're an icon for the photonovel genre. You will continue this series.
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I'm a Toydarian, mind tricks don't work on me.
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Lance, what can I say! a really tremendous piece of work, the dioramas, especially the hangar are superb and your images evoke childhood memories of my Star Wars experience. There is months of work here I can tell. I can only equate creating these photo novels to a master chef spending weeks searching for the perfect ingredients then days preparing and creating a gourmet meal, only to see it gobbled up in minutes with little or no consideration to it's creator.
There is but one nitpick, so I'll get that out the way now... The use of the word "Actual" reminded me of Battlestar Galactica, and while I am a huge fan of the recent series it was very gritty and dark, whereas Star Wars is more of a fantasy setting harking back to more innocent sci-fi, I just found that particular section of dialogue took me to a different Universe.
Positive stuff now...I was genuinely sad for poor Red, he was loyal right to the end. This is particularly relevant as my wife is just about to replace her car of the past 7-years for a shiny new one, the car has been totally reliable but as it's now getting on a bit it's likely to be scrapped by the garage that traded her in. I was thinking today how we rely on our machines, and after they give us years of reliable service we end up throwing them away... I always think of the R2 units as a faithful dog, man's best friend, so your story just struck a tear gland or two. R.I.P Red! (I did call you a b***ard for killing off the poor droid, for which I apologize).
I liked the way you led us down a path, thinking that AAYLA was being pursued, surprising us at the end, clever!
I also liked the computer UI at the Imperial Base, reminded me of the original Star Wars graphics from episode 4. I'm actually trying to re-create the old UI style for my own work as I think it's more authentic to cannon.
Technically I think your photography and angles were spot on, everything matched the dialog really well, enhancing the read.
All in all an excellent presentation, I really enjoyed reading and looking at the images, your story has got off to a great start meaning I am looking forward to more installments. More late nights I'm afraid buddy! And please try be kind to droids or you'll have the RSPCD (Royal Society for the Prevention of Cruelty to Droids) AKA Wraith 9 to answer to!
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Thanks for the TERRIFIC feedback, Jules. It is very, very much appreciated!
Lance, what can I say! a really tremendous piece of work, the dioramas, especially the hangar are superb and your images evoke childhood memories of my Star Wars experience. There is months of work here I can tell. I can only equate creating these photo novels to a master chef spending weeks searching for the perfect ingredients then days preparing and creating a gourmet meal, only to see it gobbled up in minutes with little or no consideration to it's creator.
Once again, I must give all credit to the dioramas to my collaborators. In this case, the hangar was constructed by a forum member named Rebelstryker81. From all indications, he hasn't been active in the collecting community in about two years. But he was nice enough to shoot that scene for me once I saw his spectacular dio back in 2007 during the initial work on this project. I really wish I could get in touch with him to tell him that it's finally available to see!
(And the imperial dios were constructed by the retired master, Owen Driscoll.)
There is but one nitpick, so I'll get that out the way now... The use of the word "Actual" reminded me of Battlestar Galactica, and while I am a huge fan of the recent series it was very gritty and dark, whereas Star Wars is more of a fantasy setting harking back to more innocent sci-fi, I just found that particular section of dialogue took me to a different Universe.
Yes, that was a deliberate shout-out to "Galactica" - obviously not quite as subtle as I was hoping if it took you out of the story!
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But I felt that this chapter was indirectly inspired by a lot of those great "Galactica" episodes where we follow the battle with the characters watching things unfold on their monitors. Props to the show for making just the appearance of tiny blinking graphics rich with tension and dread. I actually looked at the DRADIS displays while designing the displays for this episode - the icon for the ARC fighters was heavily influenced by that look.
Positive stuff now...I was genuinely sad for poor Red, he was loyal right to the end. This is particularly relevant as my wife is just about to replace her car of the past 7-years for a shiny new one, the car has been totally reliable but as it's now getting on a bit it's likely to be scrapped by the garage that traded her in. I was thinking today how we rely on our machines, and after they give us years of reliable service we end up throwing them away... I always think of the R2 units as a faithful dog, man's best friend, so your story just struck a tear gland or two. R.I.P Red! (I did call you a b***ard for killing off the poor droid, for which I apologize).
He died a hero. We should all learn from his example! Hope you enjoy the new car. But there's no replacing old friends. :)
I liked the way you led us down a path, thinking that AAYLA was being pursued, surprising us at the end, clever!
I also liked the computer UI at the Imperial Base, reminded me of the original Star Wars graphics from episode 4. I'm actually trying to re-create the old UI style for my own work as I think it's more authentic to cannon.
Thanks. There was a lot of trial and error before I settled on the look I wanted for the graphics. I definitely wanted a simplified, iconic look that echoed the Original Trilogy and I think it came out pretty well!
Technically I think your photography and angles were spot on, everything matched the dialog really well, enhancing the read.
All in all an excellent presentation, I really enjoyed reading and looking at the images, your story has got off to a great start meaning I am looking forward to more installments. More late nights I'm afraid buddy! And please try be kind to droids or you'll have the RSPCD (Royal Society for the Prevention of Cruelty to Droids) AKA Wraith 9 to answer to!
Thanks again very much for your comments! Glad you enjoyed it. I am very pleased to have this chapter at least finished after a very, VERY long gestation period. I'd love to keep the series going, but one chapter every six years isn't exactly an effective schedule.
Here's hoping I can keep things going (but maybe with shorter chapters!)
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Awesome love to see the behind the scenes with these dio pieces specially that door they look like they are Hasbro made playsets are they plastic or foamcore?
They're made with styrene sheets glued together.
(not made by me!) :)
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I was kinda scared when I first heard about this premise. Last story you sold me on the idea and after this chapter I'm fully invested!!! Excellent job on building the suspense throughout the episode, you managed that expertly! I liked the Obi-Wan trick Aalay pulled (I'd like to think that Obi-Wan might have told her about over a cup of Jawa Juice one day at the Temple :) ).Your special effects are top notch, really excellent!!! Any chance you'd share some secrets!?! My only complaint is the grainy quality of some images takes away from some of your awesome sets, but that is hard to address if you are working with anything less than a full blown SLR. But that in no way prevented me from enjoying!!! Gosh, what a fun ride this was!!! One question is still bugging me: Is Bly alive or not!?! Thanks!!!
CC
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I was kinda scared when I first heard about this premise. Last story you sold me on the idea and after this chapter I'm fully invested!!! Excellent job on building the suspense throughout the episode, you managed that expertly!
Thanks! I know some people had skepticism about the very premise - which I think is entirely understandable - but I hope it was addressed sufficiently so the rest can be enjoyed without worrying about it! :)
I liked the Obi-Wan trick Aalay pulled (I'd like to think that Obi-Wan might have told her about over a cup of Jawa Juice one day at the Temple :) ).
Obi Wan? Nah, Aayla doesn't need any special help in that department, she's fine on her own. Aayla's trick was fairly different, anyway. :)
Besides, the last time Aayla and Obi Wan shared a drink, he got very "hands-y." So she tries to avoid that whenever possible.
Your special effects are top notch, really excellent!!! Any chance you'd share some secrets!?! My only complaint is the grainy quality of some images takes away from some of your awesome sets, but that is hard to address if you are working with anything less than a full blown SLR. But that in no way prevented me from enjoying!!! Gosh, what a fun ride this was!!! One question is still bugging me: Is Bly alive or not!?! Thanks!!!
CC
Yeah, I took the pics with my camera phone, which is obviously not the best quality. Some pics I thought were good, others...not so much. And yet, I had about the same success rate as Idid with my other digital camera. Both kinda suck, though, so I'm going to look into other options.
As for the FX - I was lucky enough to have a friend give me a copy of photoshop many years ago. It's probably out of date at this point, but still gets the job done for my needs.
However, all I learned about FX I had to do by seeking out tutorials online. There is a wealth of information about photoshop and effects if you just look for it.
I still know almost nothing about the program except how to do a few very basic or very specific things. A great tutorial about lightsabers helped me make the blaster effects. Another tutorial showed me an extremely simple way to make "scan lines" on holograms. And so forth. Some of the shots here I made back in 2007 but still look pretty good to me.
If you have the software, just hit goggle and you can find tons of resources!
I know there are even free software alternatives to photoshop that can do great things, as well.
Thanks again very much for your comments!! I look forward to YOUR next chapter!!!
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ack! Double post!
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Finally getting to catch up with this awesome chapter! This chapter is really well written, I love the twist at the end! Great trick Ayla played on them to get free! The photography and sets are just perfect. I wish I could give a better critique but I simply enjoyed every aspect of it. You have really drawn me into this story line!
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Finally getting to catch up with this awesome chapter! This chapter is really well written, I love the twist at the end! Great trick Ayla played on them to get free! The photography and sets are just perfect. I wish I could give a better critique but I simply enjoyed every aspect of it. You have really drawn me into this story line!
Thanks very much, Spry! No need for a "better critique", your comments are very, very much appreciated! Glad you enjoyed it!
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I love it. Nice Work, Nice Story. Wonderful
And hey the Dios fit to all.
Hope to see more...
Nice story! I like the twist at the end. Very M Night Shyamalan-ish dude, lol xwing
Sorry that I didn't reply to you both sooner. Thanks to you both for your words of encouragement! I am very pleased that you enjoyed the story!! Thanks for your comments!
(I'm assuming you meant Shyamalan's early work, before things all went to pot! ;) )