The Imperial Shipyards
Imperial Creative Engineering => Fan Fiction => Topic started by: beige-4 on August 29, 2010, 01:46:12 PM
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the old rancor pit of jabbas was changed into a gladiator pit by the son of jabba the hutt , rotta . one man fought his way to a final against the gladiator king , the claw . the man won against the claw crowning himself MANDALORE THE VENGEFULL.
the steamy bar was at its busiest because of the final and many spaces were filled , brokar ran towards the gate where he saw the claw sitting on a rock sharpening his axe , the new guy who made it to the final sat in the corner rubed a rock on his sword making it spark , revealing his face for half a second , a unshaved face with a scar on the temple looked towards brokar and smiled , " i can't beileve it " brokar muttered to himself
the battle had started , the gladiator who nobody new put on his gold visorless helmet on witch everyone knew was mandalorian , the claw was grinning a evil smile while swinging his axe , the anonymous fighter held his sword two-handed and edged closer towards the king of fighting and quickly striked upwards , the claw easily deflected the attack and punched his foe in the ribs. the claw advanced on him and raised his axe preparing to strike, but the gladiator quickly swinged his sword slicing a chunk of flesh from claw's stomach , then he jumped up and took a dagger from a sheath and stabbed the claw's wrist he then stabbed him with his sword , he withdrew the sword then looked up at brokar , brokar was surprised he was looking at him but then realised and nodded his head , at that moment the gladiator turned his blade making it slice claw's head off , blood splurted from the wound rapidly . then the gladiator threw his sword to the sandy floor and looked up at the cheering crowd " I AM MANDALORE THE VENGEFULL , ROTTA WILL LET ME FREE OR I WILL ASSASINATE HIM !" he shouted . the responce was blaster fire from guards , mandalore dodged the bolts as they sizzeled from gun barrels , mandalore threw a blade at the control system and as the gate opened he threw himself at the guard and a muffled crack came from the neck as he snapped it . from that day on nobody knew where mandalore was , he dissapeard from the face of the universe only one man knew where he was please comment more to come
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very cool and fluid ,
in the words of Barney Gumble ....
I LIKE IT!
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thanks mate really appreciate it
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very nice, the glatiator aspect was a nice twist from star wars. :)
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wait no more heres the second chapter please comment
“ well ? “ . mandalore and broker were sitting in a cabin with a glass of tihaar each , the cabin was in the southern hemisphere where the grass is green and the wind cold . “ if I say that I’m mandalore they’ll try and hang me . “ mandalore exclaimed “ better than my kona’huse “ broker muttered “ anyway , how are the bassiliks ? “ asked mandalore , in his gold beskar’gam “ last in the galaxy and still lookin’ good “
“ good, on the bad note boba fett died yesterday “ mandalore sipped his tihaar , it was venuh plant tihaar very rare and expensive across the galaxy “ yes , I heard , poor boba where ever he is . the only reasonable manda’yaim is dead …” broker looked down at his yellow beskar and pounded his hand against the exquisite metal “ you are the mand’alor may you thrive . “ saluted broker , standing . “ at ease . I don’t need the salute , I need the people to listen ner vod , that’s what I need . “ commanded mandalore “ just people “
Kona’huse means village ( sorry if village is something else I only read imperial commando )
Tihaar means a wine/champagne made out of berries and herbs
Beskar is metal from mandalore
Beskar’gam means iron skin
Bassiliks well look on wookie I don’t know every thing
Ner vod means brother or friend
Manda’yaim and manda’lor are the mandalorian for mandalore
Venuh plant . I made that up ;D
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that is so cool. :)
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did it especially for ya
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thanks. :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :)
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han i'll be addidng some more in a hour or so .
can't wait for the ;) ;) custom ::) i did'nt say anything :-X
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can't wait
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wait no more
“ hello old friend “ mandalore stood next to the pineos tree his gleaming armour reflected by the twin sun’s of tatooine “ is that you ? “ asked the green armoured mandalorian “ yes it’s me you old shabuire “ answered mandalore “ last I heard of you was when you was in a pit fighting like a dog “ exclaimed the mando , mandalore checked his fingernails “ you know me iv “ mandalore straightened up “ well im trying to go for mandalore “ said mandalore , iv’iinyc walked over to him “ well , you know the jedi order “ whispered iv “ yes ?” “ well my boy’s want to fight , if your doing any campaigns , me and the clones are here , so is yorin , prudii and yorin’s son .” offered iv’iinyc “ well , the jedi are a pain in the shebse but I think the uronusians are a bit more of a trouble , did you hear ? “ asked mandalore “ yes , I heard , there a bit cheeky are’nt they “ murmured iv , behind iv’iinyc strolled a silver armoured teenager with green sigils on his helmet “ hey kurnu come here “ shouted iv’iinyc “ yes sir , hi “ mumbled the boy “ this is kurnu . yorin’s son , kurnu this will be are new manda’yaim “ both of them shook hands . mandalore’s teeth gleamed as he smiled “ hello boy , im expecting you to carry on when im dead “ mandalore joked , his brown hair ruffled as the sand storm began “ shab ! “ shouted iv’iinyc “ we’ve been having to much sandstorms 4 in a week ! and where the hell is dense and his boy’s !” rambled iv’iinyc “ come in get your hands warm “ said iv’iinyc opening the door to a little hut “ thanks when do you think the storm will be over “ mandalore asked while ruffling his hair “ I don’t really know , they’ve been coming around to long ! “
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that's a great addition.
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“ stop moaning fence ! “ shouted the clone “ hey , dense are we there yet ? “ a sly smile arose on zl’s lips “ gor dang git , 1st a sandstorm and now you too skinning at me “ muttered dense “ well I concur with CT we raided that smugglers cabin pretty good “ said det , one of the original alpha squad back in the clone wars , they were all put in carbonite freezing till the time came , they didn’t know it but sgt. Biscay was still in the stormtrooper corps , so was 5.0 and deta squad , except ghostface and junker they deserted , well actually the admiral said that they weren’t battle worthy …. That’s when we destroyed 3 star destroyers , thought dense . “ alright boys I see the kona’huse lets get in “ a few moments later CT opened the door to see a gold plated mandalorian sitting cross-legged on the floor with their uncle iv’iinyc , oblivious he ran towards the kitchen saying “ fooooodd” like a zombie , when dense came in he looked at the mandalorian curiously “ uncle ? “ asked dense confused “ yes dense this is the mandalore , son of freah , remember ? “ said iv’iinyc “ looks like we’re going to have a long talk “
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really nice
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Dense sat down on the rug and began listening too mandalores tale “ as you know my father was a law keeper on mandalore uncle iv’iinyc and yorin helped him and at the mando murderer incidence a couple of bounty hunters helped him . well freah married a woman after retirement from the imperial sandtrooper corps her name was herriot lom father said she was beautiful , then the imperials killed her after taking him hostage because of him stealing blasters for yorin to fiddle with . freah went mad and when I was ten he started training me to be the best mando ever now I’m twenty and haven’t revealed anything to anyone , except brokar and … now you “ mandalore pointed a finger at the men who were sitting around the fire “ now I guess I’m going to become mandalore now … I was bought up hating the empire my father trained me for one thing … kill all imps !” said mandalore proudly “ I know what your asking , because I’m in “ said one of the many clones sitting around the mandalore-to-be “ im with ghostface count us in ! “ said dense , “ well thank you but we can’t go in with just you lot – sorry to say “ said mandalore “ oi ! we’re the best clones ever trained by jango him self !” yelled one of the clones “ shut it yardie ! we know what you mean , maybe we can get those bounty hunters from the incidence to help ? “ suggested yorin
“ great idea , all we need to know is where they are
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really great
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thanks
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Coruscant
“ god damnit ! “ shouted the chedian as he blasted yet another rounds at the converging wookies “ roosk get the ship and fire on sector 169 im going through the window !” screamed the chedian as he smashed the window with his rifle and threw a grappling hook onto a rising four-seated star fighter . he jumped as the first blaster cannons blasted out plasma “ woohoo suck on plasma hairy wookie “ shouted the chedian as he swung towards the ship , jumping from the hook , he landed athletically on the opening hatch and pressed a few buttons with his head , “ hiss arrkkkss “ slithered a trandoshan named roosk “ ah shut up and let him in “ yelled a gandus named jom kih “ yah let me in “ muttered the chedian “ hiss husss “ the trandoshan pressed a few buttons on the datapad and the hatch opened , roosk saw the the chedian was dirtier than usual , black muck scattered on his white bag trousers and the muck filled the beige skinned chest . “ hey brisk we gotta comm. From my family “ yelled a clone named tank , “ what do’s old bones want ? “ questioned brisk “ actually freah’s son wants you “
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suck on plasma hairy wookie
LOL :)
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yep with the chedian there will be humour
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the wait is over
The star fighter came out of hyperspace and in to the orbit of tattooine “ jom , me ,tank and roosk are going down to see freah’s son stay here and guard the ship call me if anything go’s wrong “ shouted brisk . the three bounty hunters walked into the miniature hanger and boarded their own star fighters , brisk in his custom eta-2 interceptor , tank in his snub fighter , and roosk in his custom winged-starfighter “ let’s go ! “ muttered brisk as he banked out of the ship’s hangar
Tattooine
“ any minute now and they’ll be here “ mumbled dense as he looked up into the blazing sky . “ the first thing to do is get are troops up we need to get mandalorians on are side bounty hunters , mercs anything on are side . “ said mandalore . three gleaming fighters rained down the sky and quickly landed the cockpits of each fighter opened up simultaneously and three figures jumped out . one was a chedian with a imperial corporal pauldron and a ponch with a thin belt at the chest holding a westar 34 blaster and the chedian who dense thought was brisk had the fur of a albinos wookie on his belt . next came tank in a white jacket and green cargo trousers and black boots he shouted a hello at the crowd of clones and mandos , next out came a yellow jumpsuited trandoshan with a set of tribal tattoos on his skin . what came next was very surprising !
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really cool :)
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just to clarify here are the names of each characters so far
the claw herosk trook
iv'iinyc fett
boba fett ( mentioned )
yorin orki
kurnu orki
brokar fesg
5.0 ( mentioned )
dense
biscay ( mentioned )
CT
ghostface
junker
Z.L ( ZELTRON LOVER )
yardie
det
mendos prudii ( mentioned )
tank
freah resglee ( mentioned )
brisk ( surname unknown )
roosk
jom kih
i think thats it
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mega bitesize !!
“ stop there ! “ shouted a sandtrooper “ osik ! “ shouted yorin as he ran back for his blaster , brisk quickly grabbed a blaster pistol and started firing at the sandtroopers “ cover fire !! move in move in !! “ words were shouted across the ranch as a ensuing battle took place “ here boy “ shouted brisk, in his reptilian voice , as he threw a blaster to kurnu , kurnu ran to the two praka trees in the rock “ valley “ as the family called it or a guest house as normal folk would call it . he quickly ducked down as a few plasma bolts hit the wall beside him “ holy fierfek “ he shouted , he sat behind the rock with his blaster faced ate the gate which protected him from people coming to get him . a figure appeared near the gate and kurnu fired a shot “ osik ! stop firing its me ! “ shouted yorin as he opened the gate with his blaster rifle turned towards the battle . “ dad what’s going on ! “ muttered kurnu “ nothing son just a misunderstanding , alright there’s been a slight change of plan you are going to tresdap with brisk , tank , dense and mandalore , me , uncle and the rest will go to perex IV and the clones will go to urik , okay ? “ stated yorin “ y.. yes dad “ stammered kurnu “ I’ll miss you “ said yorin “ now lets go outside “ said yorin standing up with his hand towards kurnu , he grabbed it and lurched up , they walked towards the ship , kurnu saw about 12 sandtrooper bodies across the sand , the trandoshan was picking weapons and bodies and lurching them in his fighter , the thing which horrified kurnu the most was brisk taking of his balaclava , tentacles rose out of a hole which kurnu assumed was his mouth and the tentacle busted into a stormtroopers chest , the whole body lurched and shivered and the tentacle came out quickly all bloody with a big red lump in its claw’s ! the hole opened and brisk swallowed the whole lot ! “ what are you lookin at kid ! “ said brisk , his red eyes gleaming “ i.. er “ stammered kurnu as he backed away and ran into a small gandus walking down a ramp “ hey ! watch where your going kid “ shouted the gandus “ sorry “ said kurnu “ your coming with me and the rest of us come on and strap your seat “ said the gandus , kurnu took one last glance at brisk , brisk was crouching next to the stormtrooper body with his whole hand in the dead man’s chest ! he quickly jumped into a seat next to dense . “ don’t worry kurnu it’s alright “
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you're really pumping these out
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Cool story! It flows nicely, and I like the dialogue. And of course the action is exciting.
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thanks guys ! and mason due to work im not really " pumping " them out as i need to hurry on these as i only have three hours a day at home so these storys may start to get slowed down . anyway i expect another chapter tonight or tomorrow as ive got a day off so prepare !
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there has to be a boring chapter :P
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sorry forget to post the chapter :P
The flight was long but what would you expect ? the ship entered the orbit of tresdap and hovered to a big skyscraper near the outskirts of tresdap spaceport , the ship landed at a small hanger at the top of the building .brisk got out of his seat first and flung himself down the ramp , roosk’s ship landed nearby and his head appeared out of the cockpit “ rwww gree “ slithered roosk as he jumped out feasting on a sandtroopers arm , dense placed his hand on kurnus shoulder and walked with him to a door “ go in here kurnu and wash and eat 8-cp will look after you “ said dense “ yes sir “ saluted kurnu as he walked into the glossy room “ up-to-date furniture and a huge holo-tv ! “ gasped kurnu “ yeah , and its got more “ said dense as he opened a cupboard and a silver and green droid walked out . “ hello , I am 8-cp cyborg human relations droid how may I offer my services “ beckoned the droid “ get me a netre’gal and give the boy blue milk , kurnu didn’t like blue milk but he was thirsty so he drank it all in one gulp , “ now kurnu take off your beskar and get in the shower ! “ ordered dense as he sipped his black ale
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listening to rock !
Kurnu came out and asked if there was anything to eat “ yes , there’s a bar down three levels here have it on me “ dense gave kurnu 100 credits “ spend it all , you need a time off for all that action back at the ranch “ said dense “ thanks “ kurnu opened the door and walked to the elevator “ get in squirm ball ! “ muttered a alien , kurnu felt a blaster’s barrel in his back “ giv’ me all your money rat ! “ said the alien , kurnu realized he still had his chest and abdomen armour on ! , kurnu pushed back and spun around and pistol-whipped the attacker with the assailant stunned , kurnu gave him a slicing uppercut “ eergghhh “ screamed the alien as he fell back against the wall firing his gun at kurnu , the initial shock-wave hit kurnu headfirst and knocked him to the glass , cracking it , hes entering the world of unconsciousness .
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Kurnu opened his eyes “ he’s awake ! “ someone exclaimed “ let me see … good , now we have to send the holomessage “ said a bandana wearing mandalorian
Perex IV
The music erupted from the speakers of a landspeeder “ I’m a rolling thunder pourin’ rain , I’m comin’ on like a hurricane !” . “ god I love this song “ shouted mandalore over the speakers . a chiming sound from mandalores commlink “ hello my mandalore how’s your life now ? “ said the digital voice of brokar , “ good , without your whiny voice though . any way have you done it ? “ asked mandalore “ yes , Mr resglee it’s all done I’ve sent it to aghhh !” screamed brokar digitally “ brokar ! “ . “ your friend is unconscious Mr mandalore . you better tell your blue armoured friend that we’ve kidnapped his son . “ the voice faded away and the mysterious man hung up “ HELLS BELLS , they gunna get you down “ screamed the holograph of the rockstar .
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“ we have to call the clones “ said yorin , they were in a dark apartment surrounded by modified guns and mandalorian armour , yorin’s safe house “ yes , I’ll call triss , he’ll be the only one sober “ exclaimed iv’innyc , a few minutes later ……
“ yes ? “ “ hi , triss can you and the clones get here ? “ asked iv’innyc “ yes, why ? is there any problem ? “ asked triss “ yes , kurnu was kidnapped and we need your help to find him “ said iv’innyc “ …. Okay , we’re coming “ triss ended the call at shouted at flak “ wake up flak ! get the others “
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The dead or dead floated through hyperspace ……
4 hours later
The dead or dead landed on the pad’ and the loading ramp extended to the floor and 36 mandalorians walked out “ well , it looks like we have the whole force then !” said yorin excitedly “ yep , we’re all here for you yorin even 3 of the jungle boys have came to help! “ exclaimed Z.L “ yeah we’ll always be here for ya yorin “ said panther ,the commander of the jungle ops squadron “ now , where these frikkers ? “ asked razor one of the pilots in the gunship which flew alpha and omeg squadron into geonosis “ well brokar ALWAYS has his micro-transmitter gps device on him so where brokar is , is where kurnu is “ said mandalore “ well I vote we get some san-b 21’s it will fit well and they work better than pistols and ghostface’s rocket-attracting gun !” said dense , the clones all laughed and remembered when all the surface to air missiles landed on ghostface’s 67 husot dacta blaster rifle “ me and spook will provide sniper cover “ said triss , alphas famous sniper , recognized for his steely silence at the most important and critical times “ I agree on that “ muttered spook “ okay then , that’s the plan then , we fast-rope in there smash the windows, throw in flashers , tap tap , x-ray’s down then we get the hostages out simple “
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an update soon SPOILER* “Ahhh I remember geonosis” … *